[art] Artart telechat review of draft-ietf-dtn-ipn-update-11
Marco Tiloca via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Fri, 14 June 2024 14:59 UTC
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Reviewer: Marco Tiloca Review result: Ready with Nits I reviewed this document as part of the Applications and Real-Time (ART) Area Review Team's ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG. These comments were written primarily for the benefit of the ART Area Directors. Document authors, document editors, and WG Chairs should treat these comments just like any other IETF Last Call comments. I previously reviewed version -09, then the following version -10 addressed my comments. This latest version -11 looks good, I have only one minor comment below. Best, /Marco [Section 5.2] * In Section 4, bullet point 2, there has been an understandable change from "MUST" to "MAY", as to the omission of the '0' Allocator Identifier from the textual encoding of an ipn URI. Consistent with that change, I think that the last sentence in Section 5.2 should be updated as follows. OLD: This means that the URIs dtn:none (Section 4.2.5.1.1 of [RFC9171]) and ipn:0.0 both refer to the BPv7 'null' endpoint. NEW: This means that the URIs dtn:none (Section 4.2.5.1.1 of [RFC9171]), ipn:0.0, and ipn:0.0.0 all refer to the BPv7 'null' endpoint. [Nits] * Section 7.2 - s/Mitigation for/The used mitigation for
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